Compare and contrast these two paragraphs:

1. for the most part, they carried themselves with poise, a kind of dignity. now and then, however, there were times of panic, when they squealed or wanted to squeal but couldn't, when they twitched and made moaning sounds and covered their heads and said dear jesus and flopped around on the earth and fired their weapons blindly and cringed and sobbed and begged for the noise to stop and went wild and made stupid promises to themselves and to god and to their mothers and fathers, hoping not to die. in different ways, it happened to all of them. afterward, when the firing ended, they would blink and peek up. they would touch their bodies, feeling shame, then quickly hiding it. they would force themselves to stand. as if in slow motion, frame by frame the world would take on the old logic—absolute silence, then the wind, then sunlight, then voices. it was the burden of being alive.

2. as we moved down the road, my hands jittery with adrenaline, i wanted to scream, “! ” as loud as i could, and keep screaming it through the whole convoy until i got to let off a round in someone. i started gripping the sides of the .50. when my hands were white, i would let go. i did that for a half-hour, and then the rage left me and i felt exhausted.

consider diction, imagery, tone, narrative structure, point of view. be as detailed as possible. the task here is to really try to identify and describe the differences – in tone, in attitude, in style – between the two stories, by pointing to specifics: point of view, sentence structure, and word choice turns of phrase and imagery