Answer and give feed back ! so recently i have been working on a horror/ thriller fictional story. i have the first part and will leave it down below so you all can read it. what i need on is that i need to see peoples opinion on what they think of the first part of the story. i can take criticism because criticism will me improve. don't hold back any ideas to me improve. first part: the never ending void oh, how i dreaded, dreaded how they looked, no, how they stared- yes, how they stared at me with fear in their eyes. they stared with fear and terror. they looked as if they had seen a ghost, as if they were filled with dismay! the whole block had heard what i’ve done. no matter how much i deny the truth, no matter how much i act innocent, they all know the real truth. if, if only i had just a few more minutes to cover the scene, this wouldn’t have happened. i remember the whole story, i remember how everything happened, every little detail from the sight of a speck of dust to the sound of a pin drop. i can tell the whole story of how my friends, no, not just my friends, my parents, all called me “mad” “crazy” “insane” but their all wrong! i repeat, they are all false. i’m not mad, i am not crazy nor insane! it all started when my mother, father, and i moved to a town that goes by the name of glass heart alley.