Does my war poem make sense? "bombs dropping, shell shocking, finger crossing i waited for the ice cream man whilst he waited for the medical van, alarms sounding, children screaming, people rushing, just because it isn't happening here doesn't mean it isn't happening , gunshots sounded, i applauded, you were wounded, i was playing, you were praying, just because it isn't happening here doesn't mean it isn't happening , i was laughing , you were crying, i was , you were dying. you were dying. just because it isn't happening here doesn't mean it isn't happening ." -safarisafa if anyone thinks i should adjust anything comment : d : d