Can someone proof read this and see if i need to make any additions or revisions?

It's a very interesting read. Just be sure that if you use any of the author's words, quotes or passages that you place quotation marks at the beginning of the quote, passage, or words " if your using your own words in that same quote be sure to use  the blocks like this [ ] to show your teacher/professor that is your own words not from the author's. Also be sure to also end the quote, passage or words with another quotation mark like so " and add the authors last name right after the quotation mark then add the period. If required ( and most times it is) be sure to include a work cited page on a page of it's own, show the title. the author the date it was published where you got the information from, when you accessed the page and it's http website address. That's the MLA format I learned during my english college classes. There are some great website's to show how to do both MLA and APA formats