Can i get some editing this? i know it sounds horrible and i'm hoping to get it to be more poetic. it's about my grandmother who has dementia and i want to make it better than it is right now.

It doesn't sound horrible at all, if that's what you're worried about!

It doesn't necessarily have to have a rhythm or structure to be poetic, the beauty that the words paint is a poem of it's own. I enjoy how artistic the poem is and how it describes your grandmother's dementia in such a tranquil and pleasant way.

As of now, I see no need to fix the poem.

This is amazing! I absolutely love this poem! Keep at it!(:

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explanation:

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in the sonnet 116 written by william shakespeare we can analyze the symbolism and say that he reuses the idea of love like a guiding star for the sailor.

reading through the poem we find out that in the line 7 there is a metaphor for the lover that is heading through the life events by love itself .