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death of a love one

a death of a love one can affect people differently. some deal with

emotion, mental, even physical and sometime all three. when i was only

16 year old two day after my birthday year of 2002 in the 12 grade i

end up lossing my grandma to cancer. see the doctor told me along with

my family already its a possibility our grandma wouldnt be able to

make it throught this process. the sad part about it i was the last one to

know anything that was going on with her. i guess my family was trying

to protect me other words shield me from knowing. couple times i when

there to go see her, my grandma was changing everytime i when up

there infront of my eyes. i really didn't except to see her like this. i

couldnt imagine what the treatment was doing to her body or her

mind. this lady infront of me that raise me mostly all my life was dying

infront of me. i remember one time i when up there to go see her she

look dead at me i couldnt see her like that so i end up turning my head.

she probably wanted to say something to me and probably couldnt say

it. i was only been strong aleast i thought i was until that one day she

come home. that's one day never came. now the day that change my

life forever when they annocement she had passed. me, i couldn't believe it or i just didn't want to. this was unprepare for me. them words she had

passed i wont expected to hear them three words maybe even for along

time but it was true. she had pass i didnt even get a chance to tell her i

love her or even a warm hug, you know. she had suffered enough

throught this sad process and she didnt have to suffer nomore she was at

peace at last. and for me go i wont be able to see her never again. this

truly became apart of me without me knowing. see my family was trying

to keep me at home from school for grief i really thought that i was

fine i really thought that because i knew she was in a better place. i

really thought i could contine going to school. i end up getting in trouble

in school, church and even at home more then a few, couldnt do my

schoolwork well anything that have to do with school ,i even end up

become very rude to people rather i know them or not. i just didnt

wanted to listen to what anybody have to say. seem like a hard patch

huh. and definitely hard pill to swallow. my hope stop existing when she

left this world. loss her period affect me in so many ways i stop going to

church because my mind start place visions in my head seeing her in

the casket she was buried in. i just couldnt do church for the longest

vision seeing her in the front of the alter scare me, i knew i shouldnt be

scare but i was. like today i'm still affected by it i haven't let go. it

definitely truly place apart in my everyday life. ain't no day go by that i

don't think of her ,miss her dearly. i just cant move on without her. i had

learn so much stuff from her and i definitely know she looking down on

me smiling. i just know for a fact she is very proud of me what type of

woman i grew up to become. i just wanted her to be here like when i

graudate and go off to college, my first marriage, my first birth and so

much more. i believe my life would had been more at ease at that time if

it wont for her time, probably. only thing i got now is memories and her

smile. maybe one day we will see each other again hopefully. you never

know what to expect but cherish every moment you have with any of your love ones. we never think that one day we will loss them. days like

these come along with side affect, its unbeareable painful experiences. its

a hard challenges for anyone of us. we all take life for granted. moment

like this never goes away. it doesnt matter how you look at it especially

for a better outcome nobody wish this on their worst enemy. i guess we

all want to live and never died. we never here to live forever.

can you me what did i wrong?