Excerpt from the right decision
lindsay rock

(1) timothy remained on the deck long after england had become but a speck on the horizon. (2) when darkness fell, he retired to the cramped quarters in steerage—the lowest passenger area with the fewest accommodations—and tried to make himself comfortable on a hard bunk bed with a thin, straw mattress. (3) around him, mothers tried to keep their babies quiet and fathers told stories to tired kids. (4) for a long time, the hum of the ship's engine, the coughs and sniffles of seasick passengers, and the mixture of ten or twenty different languages kept him awake.

read this paragraph from the passage. which sentence revision uses more precise language than the description in the paragraph?

a) for a long time, the sounds of the ship and the people made it hard for him to fall asleep.
b) timothy stayed outside for a long time even though he could no longer see his home country.
c) it took hours for him to fall asleep because of the mixture of many irritating and unfamiliar sounds.
d) around him, mothers strived to hush crying babies and fathers invented stories to entertain exhausted children.