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English, 24.06.2019 10:50 alexanderavrett

Can someone make corrections to my second part of my short story i suck at punctuation and word choice and all of that i will make this a lot of points and mark you brainiest? also, i'm not done with the story but i will finish it and i only need this part to be corrected. jasper was knocked out cold on the ground roy did not know what to do so he got his mom amanda, amanda came outside to assess the situation “oh my what happened here” said amanda “um um i don't really know” murmured roy. “we need to get him some , me take him to the hospital” amanda sputtered roy did not know how to react after that he was to shook up to reply to what his mother had said they drive as fast as they to the nearest hospital. night has passed over jasper was supposedly out cold for the whole night and he did not wake up until this afternoon later that day roy and jasper had got to talking about what happened. roy then asked “what happened to the shoes” jasper responded and said “what shoes” you were wearing my special sneakers and that's how you ran so fast into that fence “what fence” exclaimed jasper. roy had enough and waited for him to get out of the hospital roy was unsure if the shoes were still in the spot of the incident or if the hospital had them. about three days later jasper home but he was in a wheelchair because he hurt his leg, but roy noticed right away what jasper had on his lap it was his blue and orange sneakers roy freaked out about the sneakers and took them home instantly. the next day has approached and roy calls jasper first thing in the morning “hey what's up” exclaimed jasper roy simultaneously responded and said meet me outside now. the two met outside and went to the middle of the street roy pulled out the sneakers and said “these have caused too many problems and its time for them to go” roy and jasper both agreed so they tied the lases and together and threw them onto the powerline going perfectly down the middle of the street so when they both come out of the houses the can remember the times they both had with the shoes the end.

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