In my life i have experienced a loss that has     been traumatic for me. and can be for most   people. one night in november i was having a   movie night with my four kids and husband then around eight o'clock i got a phone call that changed my life forever on the other line was a family member of my brother's girlfriend and she had told me that my brother had died in a caraccident with his girlfriendi was in disbelief so right away i hung up the   phone and i called my brother over and over   and over and over again he never answered   my phone call was then that i thought to myself that it was true because my brother would never ignore my phone call. it took me years to   overcome the pain that i have felt in my heart the loss of my brother brought back so many  memories of   our childhood and the things that     happened to us while we were growing up.                good time and bad times but one thing           i knew that was thought was i would always     have each other no matter what so for me his   loss was heart breaking i stayed in bed for     weeks and weeks then it turn in to months at   time. i thought maybe the pain would never go   away. i thought to myself at some point the pain   must get end. but it didn't. i realize that i was going to have to     learn how to deal with the pain rather than.   trying to get rid of the pain because i have lost my brother someone that i grew up with he was apart of my whole life. someone i truly loved he was my sunshine my light he was always there for me. we only had each other it felt like because the woman who raised us which was our grandmother irene had passed away thirteen years ago and both of our parents where in prison and   never really truly been involved in our lives so it was my job i felt like to pay for all the awake cost and prepare everything afterwards which was getting my brother cremated and it was hard. but with the of my husband i knew that i would get it done the way my brother would have wanted it in end.    my brother would have approved of how it       all looked he was always someone i could talk     to he was a backbone for me. he was also my       husband best friend they grow up together     they loved each other. i was so depressed     when i lost him. he had a way about him that.     could really light up the midnight sky.    i was depressed and crying all the time. i knew     if my brother could here he would tell me to.     stop being crying and to carry on my his         nieces and nephews my childern i knew that if       he were alive to tell me or had a way to tell me     sister go on don't cry for me i'm in a     better place now. it was so hard but. i ended       up little-by-little getting out of bed, going to the     meetings and trying my best to not think about     the pain i felt in my heart on a constant basis     but the one way that i overcame the pain was   by going to the meeting of jehovah's witnesses   and studying the bible and learning what the   scriptures had to say about death.  i knew that one day i would see him again i     knew in my heart that one day i would give him   a hug and tell him how much i missed him.   until then i had to live with the pain of missing it  him. but learning to rely on my husband and my   family and friends taught me that i could deal   with pain inl away i thought i could never deal   with it so i can them for being a listening   ear a shoulder to cry on. they never once turned a there backs on me.   they always stayed there listening to me   whether it was good day or bad day they listen   to the pain that i was feeling and gave me.   hugs. and talked to me or even just stood there   by my side and listened which i really truly   appreciated. now i can say that i feel so much   better and i don't feel so sad anymore but for   anyone who does loose a brother or a love one.   im truly sorry and i pay to my god for them so     they can continue to live life in a good healthy.     way. can someone me and make sure that my grammar is proper and my punctooation is proper personal narrative essay

 In my life I've experienced a loss that has  

 been traumatic for me which can also be for most  

people. One night, in November I was having a  

movie night with my four kids and husband when

around eight o'clock I suddenly got a phone call that  

changed my life forever. On the other line was a  

family member of my brother's girlfriend. I could hear the tone of sadness in her voice as she explained to me that both my brother and his girlfriend had died in a car accident.

I was so in disbelief that I hung up the  

phone and I called my brother over and over  

and over again. He didn't pick up which was surreal because he always answered when I called him. At that moment I thought to myself that maybe he really was gone. After the incident  it took me years to  

overcome the pain that I felt in my heart.

The memories of our childhood and the things that happened to us growing up only reminded me of the pain.

We had our good times and bad times but one thing I knew was that we would always have each other.

His loss felt so heartbreaking that it affected me physically and mentally. I stayed in bed for  

  weeks and those weeks turned into months. It made me think that this pain would never end, but deep down inside I knew that I needed to learn how to deal with the pain rather than trying to get rid of it.

My brother, someone that I truly loved and grew up with was a part of my life that I didn't want to lose.

He was my sunshine  and was always there for me. He was the light that made my darkness disappear.

Ever since the our grandmother Irene, which was the person who raised us passed away, it always Felt like we only had each other because of the fact that both our parents were in prison and were never truly involved in our lives.

So it felt like it was my job to pay for all  

the awake cost and prepare everything  

which was getting my brother  

cremated. It was hard but with the help of  

my husband I knew that I would get it done the  

way my brother would have wanted it to be.

 My brother would have approved of how it    

all looked. He was always someone I could talk  

 to. He was a backbone for me and was also my  

 husband's best friend. They grew up together  

 they loved each other. I was so depressed  

 when I lost him. He had a way about him that  

 could really light up the midnight sky.

 I was depressed and crying all the time. I knew  

 if my brother could be here he would tell me  to

 stop being crying and to carry on with my life.  

  My Nieces, nephews, and children knew that if  

  he was still he'd tell me to not cry for him that he's in a better place now. It was so hard but I ended  

 up little-by-little getting out of bed, going to the  

 meetings and trying my best to not think about  

 the pain I felt in my heart on a constant basis.  

 But the one way that I overcame the pain was  

by going to the meeting of Jehovah's witnesses,  

studying the Bible, and learning what the  

scriptures had to say about death.

I knew that one day I would see him again; I  

 knew in my heart that one day I would give him  

a hug and tell him how much I missed him.  

Until then I had to live with the pain of missing

him, but learning to rely on my husband,

family, and friends taught me that I could deal  

with pain in a way I thought I could never deal  

with so I can thank them for being a listening  

ear and for being a shoulder to cry on.

They never once turned a their backs on me.  

They always stayed there listening to me  

whether it was good day or bad day; They listened  

to the pain that I was feeling and gave me

hugs and talked to me or even just stood there  

by my side and listened which I really truly  

appreciated. Now I can say that I feel so much  

better and I don't feel so sad anymore but for  

anyone who does lose a brother or a loved one that

i'm truly sorry and I pray to my god for them so  

they can continue to live life in a good healthy

way.

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