Is this paragraph to wordy:

about a month later, they still couldn't find paul. so, they were homeless, with no food, no paul, and no way back. the only thing they solved was why hope was in that picture, she photobombed a family picture, they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original and didn't want her in it, she cut the family out and wrote on the back, " don't go to the subway." she was one of the people to put something in the time capsule. but mathew assumed that they didn't get the message, because they were too busy to look at the other side of the paper.

Hello!

I don't find the paragraph to be too wordy at all. I don't understand the entire context of the paragraph, only because I don't know the topic that it is written on. Despite this, I was still able to follow the meaning of the paragraph.

Something that I did notice is that you have one run-on sentence in your paragraph. You wrote "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture, she photobombed a family picture, they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original and didn't want her in it, she cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"

Instead, you could reword it into multiple different sentences to make the idea complete. I would recommend you turn this section into: "The only thing they solved was why Hope was in that picture. She photobombed a family picture and they gave her the printed version because they deleted the original one and didn't want her in it. She cut the family out and wrote on the back, 'Don't go to the subway.'"

I hope this helps you! Have a lovely day!

- Mal

hello,

this starts with

the areas residents asking congress for admission.

this is the first step in the process of admitting a new state,

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