Which shows revisions that would correct this problem? A) I went to the Magnolia Mall in Silver City. I went shopping. I went home. I went to bed. B) We went to the movies, and then we went to the mall. After that, we stopped at Cleo's Barbecue for dinner and ordered the daily special. C) Joanna, Cynthia, Jayla, Bonnie, and Lexie went to the mall. They went shopping. They went out to eat at Antonio's Pizzeria. They did not get home until after 11 p. M. D) Cleo's Barbecue has delicious food. Antonio's Pizzeria has delicious food. Everyone likes the food at Cleo's Barbecue. Everyone likes the food at Antonio's Pizzeria.

hm, switch the relative; nominative and indefinite; objective ? not too bright in the knowledge of the english.

hmm, sadly there is no dialogue. there is no place in the story where he is talking to anyone. it's more of just describing what he eats and where he sleeps. you have to become anne frank, give details of where you are, what other folks look like, how the environment is. have a little bit of dialogue tell of what people are specifically saying. anne frank talked about her entire household including the people, the objects, the lighting, the food they ate, and even the smell in the air. there has to be more to your diary entries, the whole story in its current state is only about peter van daan, the food, the sounds, and where he sleeps. also he seems to be writing only once a year yet more than that happened from day to day. for a friend, i can you write it out, if you want.

yes this is an analog in my view

a is the indefinite article