In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use correct spelling and grammar. Learning to swim is one of my happiest childhood memories. The beach offers more than a place to develop strong swimming skills. There are many things to do at the beach. It is unfortunate that so many people spend every day indoors. More people should take the time to visit their local beaches. I am glad I learned to swim at the beach.

i don't really love my math teacher

explanation:

and the reason being is because she get me in trouble for the smallest things that i really don't be doing all the time it be my friends that's around me.and i love to do things that other people but when she get on my nerves i don't talk to no one i just sit there and do my work half the time.

really not a paragraph just don't want to say a lot about her : )

if you could vote brainliest that would be absolutely phenomenal. : )

i believe the answer(s) would be all but external conflicts.

what’s the topic your looking for

thinking about things and referring to books instead of acting on superstition and gossip.