HELP Practice
Revise the three sentences below. Carefully read and underline any nonspecific or overused language you find. Then revise each sentence by replacing the words you circled with clear, specific language. An example has been completed for you.

Example sentence -
Before: The girl went down to the ocean and saw some cool things.
After: My best friend Leslie strolled happily down to the edge of Back Cove and gazed delightedly at the colorful windsurfers zooming back and forth.
Before: We had a fine time at the big thing the other night.
After:My best friend and I had a awesome time at the fair last night.
Before: There was this one animal at that place we passed that was pretty cool.
After: They're was a huge mountain lion at the zoo we passed. It was awesome when it swiped it's claws at us!
Before: At school, we did many neat, fun things.
After:
Clear and Precise Writing
Write a description of a place that is important to you. Write at least seven sentences. Use strong and vivid word choices (especially verbs) to help readers connect to your feelings about your place. Use the box below to write your description.

Select the correct text in the passage. in richard connell's short story "the most dangerous game," zaroffs aristocratic appearance and dignified manners mask his sinister, animalistic nature. which line from the excerpt best provides a glimpse into his true nature? rainsford's first impression was that the man was singularly handsome; his second was that there was an original, almost bizarre quality about the general's face. he was a tall man past middle age, for his hair was a vivid white; but his thick eyebrows and pointed military mustache were as black as the night from which rainsford had come. his eyes, too, were black and very bright. he had high cheekbones, a sharpcut nose, a spare, dark face-the face of a man used to giving orders, the face of an aristocrat. turning to the giant in uniform, the general made a sign. the giant put away his pistol, saluted, withdrew. "ivan is an incredibly strong fellow," remarked the general, "but he has the misfortune to be deaf and dumb. a simple fellow, but, i'm afraid, like all his race, a bit of a savage." "is he russian? " "he is a cossack," said the general, and his smile showed red lips and pointed teeth. "so am i." half apologetically general zaroff said, "we do our best to preserve the amenities of civilization here. forgive any lapses. we are well off the beaten track, you know." laughter shook the general. "how extraordinarily droll you are! " he said. "one does not expect nowadays to find a young man of the educated class, even in america, with such a naive, and, if i may say so, mid-victorian point of view. it's like finding a snuffbox in a limousine. ah, well, doubtless you