Carrie and Kylie giggled. Neither of them knew what they had just found. They thought that they had discovered a cool looking rock. They had no idea that they were holding a real life dinosaur egg. This surprise would dawn on them later, when they brought the egg home. Carrie was using the egg as a paperweight, so she kept the egg under her desk lamp. But this egg would soon hatch, and Carrie and Kylie were about to have the adventure of a lifetime.

Read this student's rough draft. i know it doesn't sound like much, but am psyched about the school fundraiser this spring. we are sponsoring a slam-dunk contest (on an eight-foot rim) for local middle schoolers. we're charging an entry fee for participants that will cover our costs, and we’ll charge admission at the door! three dollars per person—ka-ching! six of my neighbors have already said they are coming. i mean, who wouldn't come? participants will wear their school jerseys, and all their friends will come to cheer! which concluding sentence best reflects the writer's voice? the contest will take place in the liberty middle school gym, and the maximum capacity is 250 spectators. the contest promises to enrich our community as a variety of schools unite to support our fundraising effort. it will be sweet, because the band is providing music in the stands, and the dance squad is performing. students’ enthusiasm for this endeavor has blossomed, and it will reach full flower as the contest approaches