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can u rewrite this paragraph in other words

 Revised and corrected:

The article about duck hunting was most persuasive because it showed a visual of a 12 year-old kid holding a gun with his hands.

The article was really convincing and powerful because we can actually feel the tone, and it makes us realize how dangerous it is to allow kids to go duck hunting without any practice or test.

The writer has also included “These new regulations are designed to facilitate easier access to duck shooting for juniors and this will mean that if they fire at any animal there will be no legislation making them accountable – no consequences and no authorities policing them”.

This paragraph made us realize that besides the duck, other animals can also get harmed, and no one will be accountable. This is unacceptable. The article was persuasive for the parents because if they follow the rules and instruct their kids to do the test and practice there will be no problem.

Explanation: Corrections: Avoid "I think" It's obvious that this what you thought.

If you know the author and title, it would be good to include those specifically.

Release means to let go. Realize means to comprehend or see in a new way.

tell/ make  = instruct,  or direct

send/let  = allow.  Decide in the word you mean. No / in essay answers.

Avoid repetition. Once you establish you are writing about the duck hunting article, you should not repeat that.

themselves

an intensive pronoun is a pronoun that ends in self or selves, such as himself, herself, themselves, yourself, ourselves. since band members is a third person plural, the correct intensive pronoun would be themselves. if the band was talked about as a collective noun, itself would be the appropriate intensive pronoun. intensive pronouns are used to add emphasis to the noun it's modifying which is why it directly follows it.