Review your diary entry and revise one section to add more dialogue, description, or sensory language. Type your revision below.

I would include dialogue between the forest ranger and Adelle's father: He asked the ranger, "Have you seen any bears?" The ranger laughed, gave me a reassuring smile as though he knew why we were asking, and replied, "No one's seen a bear in this area in over five years!" I wonder if he could see the terror in my eyes.

Explanation:

here's some tricks. write on a book that you have read and really enjoyed. first, start by writing down basic event in the book. have your first paragraph be an intro explaining like the author, the reason the book was written if known, and other backround info like that. paragraph two explain what happens in the first few chapters and the signifigance it had. then for paragraph 3, do the same thing but for the middle. i'm pretty sure you get the point for paragraph 4. just rap things up and explain the call to action. for the final paragragh (paragraph 5) , explain your views on the book, the message, ect. tip: something that might is to go onto cliff notes or something and read the anaylisis of each chapter.

some books i recommend;

diary of anne frank

lord of the flies