Can someone help analyse my poem? Please bear in mind it is written by an 8th grader. Vermillion swords drip with blood,

They pierce the hindering contorted clouds to the north,

And the undimmed in the south,

The limitless waves of the sky reflect the battlefield.

The swords weave the thread of death in the mist,

They sink and rise in the silk of the velvet sky,

The swords collide and clash with clangs,

The echoes of demise reverberate throughout my ears.

I have slash open my enemies,

The scarlet hue of their corpses bows before me,

I am everything,

Without me there is nothing.

But darkness’s claw clutches hold of my eyes,

Silence's teeth cut through my ears,

The coldness of the steel penetrates my muscles,

And.

Many ships have drowned in the tributaries of history,

Everything is nothing in this vast ocean of time,

Even I have drowned in this ocean.

Explanation:

Its pretty good, I would reccommend that you should change

"The echoes of demise reverberate throughout my ears." to "The echoes of demise reverberate in my ears."

"I have slash open my enemies, " to "I slash open my enemies"

"The scarlet hue of their corpses bows before me, " to "the scarlet hue of their corpses bow before me"

"But darkness’s claw clutches hold of my eyes, " to "But darkness’ claw clutches my eyes, "

"The coldness of the steel penetrates my muscles," to "The steel's coldness penetrates my muscles,"

also I don't really know what the And line is for.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)

an argumentative essay presents objectively a topic and its main characteristics. besides, it states all this information and facts by giving authentic and substantiated proof to the audience. by contrast, a persuasive text purpose is to convince the audience about some facts by presenting them according to his/her emotions and feelings. the main purpose of a persuasive text is to convince the audience to agree with the author´s opinion. on the other hand, in the argumentative essay, the author leads the writer to recognize his/her point of view as the correct one.