This is for a school essay tell me if it sounds good or what i can fix i want to get good grade THE WAY WE ARE

I had always been shy as a child some may have even called me weird I barely had any friends in fact I had none but that all changed. it was my second semester maybe in the early April at my new school prince high I had always picked the seat in the back corner on the left side and normally no one would sit next to me. almost hallway through the class a girl busted through the door I guess you could say she looked ill very skinny and weak in the knee's she trembled to the seat next to me I looked at her as if she was crazy no one has ever sat next to me before did she even know who I was? she looked around the class everyone was whispering and pointing at her she looked at her desk ashamed of herself. the teacher finally spoke up " I see you are late" " its Amelia miss" said the girl still looking at her desk. " I expect you not to come that late again Amelia I was told to expect great things from you, know back to work class" the girl started to slowly look up at the board but then turned to me. " are you an outcast to?" "I guess you could say I am." " perfect lets meet up after school in the front near the pick up line" she said with a grin I was so confused what was she planning in that head of hers. it was five thirty I had been waiting for more than twenty three minutes where was she? she ran out tears in her eyes and then she tripped a boy came out of the school with gun in his hand bared to the girls head. " why are you doing this please don't hurt me" tears where running down her face " don't you want to be freed from this world as sick as you are we might as well say you have cancer am I right I know I am don't think of this as I'm doing it just to do it don't you wanna end this pain all this suffer that you have faced over the years" he said laugh with a sick look on his face " your just like me sick so whatcha say lets end this together." i didn't know what to do i stood there in fear but then something happened to my body my legs started moving they where running towards the boy but then he panicked and pointed the gun towards me his finger on the trigger i was only a couple feet away from him. his finger slowly pulling back the trigger i saw a very faint silver bullet come out and shoot me in the stomach i fell back clutching my stomach screaming with pain and then everything went dark. she saw me close my eyes and ran over to my body holding me in her arms but it was to late the boy picked up the gun again and put it to the girls head he pulled the trigger the last thing i could see was her face sickly ill I looked at her will a smile and then she collapsed the last picture of her holding me in her arms.

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