Help me with the essay pls

Start with:

Head down, hoodie up. Here, you can't have an identity, you can't be noticed by people...it becomes madness when you show your true colors...so you have to fake it. Or simply not have one at all.

Explanation:

Something like this would grab attention and make the reader curious as to what's going on, for this introduction is more vague and does not explain everything in detail which would most likely lead the reader want to know more. Something along these lines. I don't think i can help you type ALL of your essay, but hope this is a good start.