02.10 Kick it Up a Notch You will revise one body paragraph from your compare and contrast article. You will submit the original paragraph, the revised paragraph, and a short paragraph describing how your revisions improved your writing.
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Review your informational article. Choose one body paragraph to revise and copy this paragraph into a new document.
Review your paragraph and make sure you have a topic sentence and supporting ideas for this topic.
Combine two or more sentences in your paragraph for varied syntax.
Review your paragraph for correct English language conventions. Correct any errors.
Write one short paragraph describing how your revisions improved your writing.
You will submit:
The original draft of your body paragraph
The revised draft of the same paragraph
A short paragraph describing how your revisions improved your writing
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Plss Help!!! My paragraph is:
"Even though they both help people the Dragon Slayers save people from harm while Cassandra helps with heating homes and fueling school busses. Cassandra may not help people directly, she really only helps the environment directly. Unlike Cassandra, the Dragon Slayers help people directly almost every day! The Dragon Slayers risk their lives almost every day to save people from plane crashes to fires. Cassandra may not go around and save people from certain doom, but she helps people heat their homes in the winter. “We were astonished by the realization that people in our own country were struggling to heat their homes in our harsh New England winters,” Cassandra explained. While Cassandra was trying to make fuel called biodiesel, across the U. S, the Dragon Slayers were answering emergency calls from their home people in Aniak, Alaska. There are so many differences between saving people and helping the environment yet there are also a lot of similarities. The Dragon slayers and Cassandra are both very ambitious to be doing what adults typically do. For instance, saving a person from a burning building or making a fuel for cars called biodiesel. Another thing they have in common is that they are both teens!"
Thank you!