Can you revise my paragraph

you should take out the part about the dog but overall it good

Explanation:

You need to look over your punctuation in the first line. In the first line, Instead of  "while there" I would put " while attending". Instead of "she", I would put "Nesbit"

Explanation:

the purpose of a nonfiction text is to give the text a rap up. for example, when i say : frogs are interesting animals is an ending. then when i say: frogs are unique in different ways. that is an intro.

kenny´s more than 25 years of relevant public service. in the army for two decades, as official representative for four years, and now for the department of state, as ambassador. this career clearly demonstrates great capacities in the public sector.