Curfews have been used effectively in many towns to reduce crime. by having kids return home at a set time, they will also achieve better grades in school. high-schoolers who obey their curfew will make our nation stronger by becoming better leaders. even president obama agrees, "education is the key to this country's future." which revision criterion could be used to improve this excerpt? a. logic b. transparency c. word choice d. use of support

A. Logic

Explanation:

This is the revision criterion that could be used to improve this excerpt. In this text, the author makes the claim that curfews are effective in reducing crime. He also claims that it helps children have better grades and that it makes better leaders. However, he does not support it with logic or evidence. There is not explanation as to why curfews have all these effects. Therefore, the passage is not very logical.

  plan: i will begin with a quotation about the importance of unity in a community. then, i will state my claim that an activity will unite our school by creating a shared vision, purpose, and direction. in the body, i will use three main points that describe the different avenues the students can take: through a variety of clubs, through a special event, or through an awareness week. i will provide evidence about other towns that have unity activities and the kinds of events that they include. pictures will illustrate my three main points in action. for the ending, i will restate the main idea in a new way and pose a question to keep the audience thinking.