Can someone revise my poem for word choice and rhyme patterns? i feel like my rhymes aren't really good, and i would like some in correcting them.
even when the teasing vines
force me, submerge me in the adhesive oil,
she's there to lead the way,
her golden scruff as bright as foil,
the path, narrow and taunting, is unfrightening
as long as her leaning head maintains my balance.
what will i ever do as the tangled hair grows light,
as her gentle cranium becomes lifeless, lowered, long;
i wish to never visualize that future, and hopeful i never will, for if it is reality, i could not tread through the ghostly forest any longer, the ghosts shall devour my shriveled songs.

different strategies reach different people based on their ability to understand the material. (from personal experience) when writing an argumentative essay write explaining the subject as though your audience never heard of it before and it is just being introduced, then explain why other people hate it also, afterward you would explain why that would be wrong. i hope that : )

either a donut or a sphere or a pancake or a flat sphere. it depends on where the vertical line is.

if the line goes through the center of the circle and is perpendicular to a diameter containing the center, then you get a flat circle.

if the line and the diameter of a the circle meet in the center of the diameter and at an angle, you get a pancake.

if the line is on the circumference of the circle and is at right angles   to the circle you get a ring.

if the line contains the diameter, you get a sphere.

the the line is parallel to the diameter and touches the circumference, you get a donut.