Please help! You will revise one body paragraph from your informational article. Then you will write a reflection on the changes you have made. You will submit the original paragraph, the revised paragraph, and the reflection paragraph.

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Review your informational article. Choose one body paragraph to revise. Copy this paragraph into a new document.
Combine two or more sentences in your paragraph for varied syntax.
Review your paragraph for any use of passive voice. Revise those sentences.
Write a short reflection paragraph on the revision process. Describe the changes you made and how these changes improved your writing.
Save and submit:
The original draft of your body paragraph
The revised draft of the same paragraph
The reflection on the changes you have made
Save your work to your computer or drive.
Submit your work in 02.09 Syntax and Voice.

here's the paragraph I chose
Video games are great for your brain! They have been proven to increase manual dexterity, gray matter (in your brain), and help with social skills even! “In a study involving a group of surgeons, researchers found that those who played video games were faster at performing advanced procedures and made 37 percent fewer mistakes than those who didn’t.”. Gray matter is associated with muscle control, memories, perception, and spatial navigation. It has been found that playing video games regularly may increase gray matter in the brain and boost brain connectivity. The stereotype that people play video games is false. “Past research involving children found that those who played more video games were more likely to have good social skills, perform better academically, and to have built better relationships with other students because of the social and collaborative component to some types of games.” This happens because you can usually talk to a character, if you say something mean or threatening, there will be consequences. Unfortunately, video’s do have downsides as well.