As a result of a volcanic eruption, Enkai and the cattle were thrown into the sky. Enkai wanted to save his cattle. He grew a tree that bridged the sky and the earth. The cattle walked down the tree to Neiterkob. Neiterkob and the Maasai tribe took over caring for the cattle. Why does the summary need to be revised?

This summary needs to be revise because it lacks transition words to connect the ideas.

Explanation:

The summary we are analyzing here is about the story "The Beginnings of of the Maasai," which explains the origins of the Maasai culture and the people's relationship with Enkai, their god. The Maasai are a semi-nomadic indigenous group settled in Tanzania and Kenya.

The problem with the summary is that is lacks transition words. As their name suggests, transition words are used to transition from one idea or sentence to the next. Examples are: so, then, after that, because of that, in addition, etc. Let's revise the summary and add a few transition words to see how much better it sounds and how much more smoothly the ideas flow:

"As a result of a volcanic eruption, Enkai and the cattle were thrown inot the sky. Enkai wanted to save his cattle, so he grew a tree that bridged the sky and the earth. Thus, the cattle walked down the tree to Neiterkob. Then, Neiterkob and the Maasai tribe took over caring for the cattle."

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)