In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. Explain where it could be improved. Then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing
stronger. Make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. Use
correct spelling and grammar.

Playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. The winter offers more than
time for kids to have fun. There are many things to do in the snow. It is unfortunate that so
many people find the wintertime annoying. More people should step outside to enjoy the
snow. I am glad I grew up where it snows. (5 points)