His bedroom is a disaster. Think: Don’t tell me that it’s messy. Describe the objects in the room, and how they are placed, and let the reader infer that it is a “disaster.” What does it smell like? Consider using a creative simile or metaphor.

Showing:

1. They person eating:

They were a glutenous person.

They were fat and sloppy.

They were eating a big, greasy hamburger.

They were eating it grotesquely, smashing it to their face.

2. Jessica dresses unusually:

She was wearing a rainbow poncho with overalls over the top.

Other people were wearing plain t-shirts and jeans.

3. There was a storm outside:

I saw raindrops on the window.

A storm looks dark and dreary, you can hear the booming thunder and hear the pattering of the rain, it feels wet and cold, it smells nice and fresh.

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he believed if we do not fight back the britins would be in every household