Revise the following paragraph from a student essay. Focus on making the main claim clearer, strengthening the evidence, and addressing problems with plagiarism. You may choose to use portions of the paragraph as they are written. Underline any phrases or sentences that you copy from the original paragraph. Then use bold font to highlight any sentences you added to the paragraph. (15 points) Student paragraph:
Eating healthy foods is a really cool thing to do for your body. Healthy food can actually slow down the aging process. Foods that are high in anti-oxidants and omega-3 fatty acids protect cells and help the cells live longer (p. 20 -- Olivia Anderson, a natural foods chef). Living longer lets you do more. Ian Jones on pg. 15: "People in their 80s give more back to their communities than those who died in their 60s ever did." Healthy food means a long good life. And living longer is awesome!

Which is the best paraphrase of the text? the capability of a bicycle makes some people want to go very fast and others to go very slow. as long as you are careful, feel free to ride like the wind. when feeling brave on a bicycle you should ride fast, but when feeling afraid riding slow is wise. if you are unable to coast, it is pointless to even ride. if you’re going to ride a bicycle, you should throw caution to the wind and take over the road, swerving where you like and taking full advantage of your ride. it’s a real joy to be able to ride a bicycle, where you have the choice of going as fast or as slow as you like, using as much courage as you feel like using.

The cat sits on a tin roof. the sentence above uses the verb mood in the a. subjunctive. b. conditional. c. indicative. d. imperative.

In another country by ernest hemingway (excerpts) excerpt 1 "in the fall the war was always there, but we did not go to it any more. it was cold in the fall in milan and the dark came very early. then the electric lights came on, and it was pleasant along the streets looking in the windows. there was much game hanging outside the shops, and the snow powdered in the fur of the foxes and the wind blew their tails. the deer hung stiff and heavy and empty, and small birds blew in the wind and the wind turned their feathers. it was a cold fall and the wind came down from the mountains." excerpt 2 "the people hated us because we were officers, and from a wine-shop someone called out, "a basso gli ufficiali! " as we passed. another boy who walked with us sometimes and made us five wore a black silk handkerchief across his face because he had no nose then and his face was to be rebuilt. he had gone out to the front from the military academy and been wounded within an hour after he had gone into the front line for the first time. they rebuilt his face, but he came from a very old family and they could never get the nose exactly right. he went to south america and worked in a bank. but this was a long time ago, and then we did not any of us know how it was going to be afterward. we only knew then that there was always the war, but that we were not going to it any more." 19 select the correct answer. what important fact about the wounded soldiers is reflected by the repetition of the bolded sentences in the excerpts from "in another country" by ernest hemingway? a. it establishes the irony that, although the wounded soldiers have physically left the warfront, the war continues to haunt them psychologically. b. it shows the gradual loss of hope and growing depression of the wounded soldiers and their need for distractions. c. it establishes the wounded soldiers’ determination to shun war and disobey military commands to return to the front after they recover. d. it shows the wounded soldiers’ sadness and disappointment at the lack of gratitude from the people they risked their lives to protect. e. it shows the wounded soldiers’ belief that the war would never end, even as thousands of soldiers were killed or wounded and sent to hospitals. reset next