I need help reviewing this English 2 Essay What is the topic of your paper?
perseverance

Where are you in the writing process?
I think I'm on track but ready for feedback
- So we started out on a prewriting Graphic organizer which was putting together cites and explanations from articles that we read previously. We then moved on to online. This is the rough draft before we do the editing and then finally the final paper. we need to make sure that there are transitions and background information that it will go smoothly and for it not to be choppy. the teacher is very picky and wants it to go smoothly and not to be choppy. That is probably the number one thing should we look at. also in English essays, it's very important to have the right grammar and punctuation. The essay must be 5 paragraphs no more no less
- Could you review my essay for higher-order concerns (thesis, organization, and paragraph development) and Grammar, punctuation, Making sure there are transitions and background information so the essay is smooth and NOT choppy

animal farm, written by george orwell, is a representation of russia after the revolution that led stalin to take over power.

in this excerpt, the central idea seems to be that the animals (a representation of society), when they believe to be working for a greater good and equality, are obedient and productive. they were convinced that, after expelling the owner (jones) from the farm, they would live in harmony and be fairly treated.

as we know, the pigs become the leaders and grow more selfish and dictatorial with time. in the end, they look and act in a way so similar to humans that it is impossible to tell the difference. the ideals of equality are shattered, and the farm turns out to be worse than it was before. the animals are manipulated with false propaganda and forced to work in order to enrich the pigs.

d. cassius cannot believe that a weakling like caesar has become so great.

substitute y = 2x - 4 to x + 2y = 12:

x + 2(2x - 4) = 12     use distributive property

x + (2)(2x) + () = 12

x + 4x - 8 = 12     add 8 to both sides

5x = 20     divide both sides by 5

x = 4

put the value of x to the first equation:

y = 2(4) - 4

y = 8 - 4

y = 4

it is important so later on in life they . can solve issues like that or other tough times in their life.. and also have info on those topics.

they can talk about topics like that by sitting the person down and talking with them.

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