Compared to the dialogue that makes up most of the excerpt, which unfolds in real time, the paragraph below is fast paced, covering many events into a very short passage. Write your own version of this paragraph, revising the pacing so that it unfolds more slowly and describes the scene with more details. As you write, remember to: Flesh out scene the with effective word choice and vivid description. Maintain the style and tone that the author has established. Use a variety of phrases and dependent clauses to slow down the pacing and add details.