What can i do to improve my sentence? : it’s showing emotional appeal and mentioning suffering from the issues presented causing the audience to evoke pity and sympathy; trying to persuade them to see their point of view and feel for them

For starters , explain what is being shown such as the (Emotional Appeal) if your going to state all of this in 1 sentence also include all the information. Use "Audience" instead of "them" so it doesn't sound as repetative it may sound repatative in terms of word choice but bigger subtext will create influx in your sentence.

Explanation:

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The excerpt shows emotional appeal towards one's suffering from ..(include what the issue is) ..  causing the audience to feel pity and sympathy towards (name of person) ; whilst trying to persuade the audience to see their point of view and feel for (name of person) .

realistic fiction depicts life and society in a true to life  manner.

its main characters are dynamic.

they grow and transform with their experiences, making it easier for readers to  relate to them.

this genre primarily focuses on the  daily struggles  of ordinary people, validating their experiences.

hope that ! : )