Giys please help! Can you help me fix my paragraph. This an ACE-IT paragraph.. My teacher said that my paragraph is good but some of my sentences are losing clarity.. I don't know what to add or remove in this paragraph. Also I had two evidence and interpretation because it was the requirement. This is a novel Kitchen by Banana Yoshimoto. Assertion:Using the psychological lens, the author from Kitchen explores the issue of fragile friendship between Mikage and Yuichi that caused their relationship as friends to be unstable.

Context: During Yuichi’s drunkenness, Mikage feels hurt by what he said because Yuichi thought she only tangled up with him and staying together could make things complicated. At that time, Mikage feels betrayed because she thought they were together to cope up with moving on about Eriko’s death and it seems like he doesn’t completely trust her. At this point, Yuchi and Mikage seem like they are in a dispute situation because witnessing death impacted them a lot that caused their decision to waver and assume that breaking apart was the best solution.

Evidence:Yuichi told Mikage, “ The two of us may be in the epicenter of death, but I was hoping to spare you this misery. It could be like this for as long as we stay together.” (pt. 7, p. 3).
Interpretation: This part expressed Yuichi’s distrust of Mikage and how death kept him hesitant to tell her about his true feelings after the death of Eriko. This statement caused their relationship to become unstable as Yuichi told Mikage that she only got stuck with him because it seems that death is following them. Assuming that Mikage is better off without him because she already experienced more than enough sadness.

Evidence: Mikage stated, “ Even though we’re closer to each other than to anyone else in the world, even though we’re friends, we don’t join hands.” (pt. 7, p. 3).
Interpretation: This evidence signifies the problem of their relationship because of their unwillingness to express and subconsciously created a distance of themselves at some point of hurting each other’s feelings.

Interpretation: This phrase “we don’t join hands” means they insist on standing on their own two feet and they have different perspectives in their lives. It defines their friendship as fragile because the more they get deeper, they end up hurting each other because of hesitation to open up and the fear that everything will be messed up.

Ties-back: As a result, Mikage and Yuichi show an invisible distance between them because they were untrue to their hearts and their relationship struggles to overcome tragedies and the possibility to end things between them. The author demonstrates that even close friends couldn't tell their true feelings because of the fear that the relationship can end up on bad terms and things will not go back as it is.