Write a grade 9 paragraph of animal survey

What is wrong with the sentence. the car is packed, we're already to go, and the weather is looking beautiful.

Which type of rhetoric is used in this sentence? while i'm certain some will disagree with what i'm about to say, i respectfully ask them to listen to the evidence i will provide to support my claim

During the revising stage in the writing process, the author freely explores topics for further inclusion in the work polishes the writing, fixing minor grammatical errors gets his or her ideas down in roughly the form he or she intends corrects major errors and improves the work's content