As he paddled back to claiborne, a hope flickered within zeitoun that his siblings might see him on tv. perhaps they would see what he was doing, that he had done something good by staying in his adopted city. the zeitouns were proud, and there was plenty of sibling rivalry that had pushed them all to an array of achievements—all of them measured against the deeds of mohammed. none of them had ever done something like that, none had achieved on his level. but zeitoun felt again that perhaps this was his calling, that god had waited to put him here and now to test him in this way. and so he hoped, as silly as it seemed, that his siblings might see him like this. why does the author include zeitoun’s thoughts?

to emphasize how his Muslim faith drives his actions

faulty parallelism is a grammar construction where there is no balance in the parts of a sentence they have a similar meaning but the grammar structure is not equivalent.

the correct version of this faulty parallelism in the sentence is:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation's third president.

the problem with the first version is that the sentence:

"jefferson was both the writer of the declaration of independence"

presents jefferson as both a subject and an agent for the verb "write" because if he was "the writer" then the declaration of independence was written by him, besides that fact, the sentence presents a dependent clause.

while the second sentence:

he was the nation's third president.

presents a basic subject+verb+object structure

so, to give a proper balance to the structure, or better said, to give a parallel structure, we must write a basic s+v+o structure in both sentences:

jefferson wrote the declaration of independence, and he was the nation third president.

repetition is used to emphasize a feeling or idea, create rhythm, and/or develop a sense of urgency.