Damon is writing an essay evaluating andrew carnegie’s contributions to american society. damon has done research on the topic and has arrived at his conclusion. he drafts the following thesis:
andrew carnegie’s contributions were mostly positive for america.
what might damon’s teacher say about his thesis statement? how could he write a better thesis statement?

Damon's teacher might say that Damon's thesis is too vague. The thesis is the main idea that an essay discusses. It also refers to the position that the author takes on a particular subject. The author is meant to defend this position and try to convince the audience to support him.

In this case, the thesis that Damon has written is too vague. It does not address what contributions Carnegie made to America, nor does it explain why they were mostly positive.

What Damon could do to improve his thesis is make it more complex. Damon could add a little more information and make his claim more specific.