Read the conclusion paragraph of an essay discussing the benefits of a year-round school schedule below. What revision must be made in order to make it an effective conclusion? Schools that move to a year-round schedule instead of a nine-month schedule have reaped the many benefits of this structure. First, students have time to rest throughout the year, helping them to feel refreshed and ready to learn. Furthermore, students do not have to spend as much time reviewing information that they would inevitably forget over the three-month summer vacation. Finally, short intervals of time off allow struggling students to receive extra tutoring throughout the learning process. Overall, the benefits of a year-round schedule can improve the learning experience for students.

Transitional words or phrases should be added at the beginning of each sentence to transition between ideas.

A sixth sentence should be added, as effective conclusions contain a minimum of six sentences.

A transitional word or phrase should be added at the beginning of the first sentence to transition from the body to the conclusion.

The word choice should be revised to convey an objective tone rather than a subjective one.

according to hess's theory, when the magma cooled, it would expand and push the tectonic plates apart. it would push the north and south america plates to the west and eurasia and africa ones to the east. the atlantic ocean would get wider but the coastlines of the masses would stay the same.

harry hammond hess was a geologist and a united states navy officer in the second world war. he is considered to be one of the founding fathers of the theory of plate tectonics. he is known for his theories on sea floor spreading, stating that the movement of the continents was the result of see floor spreading. the continents are attached to the plates and do not move separately. the plates themselves shift and change shape, carrying the continents along.

using the scientific method.

panem is a communist totalitarian dictatorship where all the resources and how they are allocated belongs to the capitol. the districts exist only to provide goods and services for the capital and most of the citizens live in poverty. it is a police state where the "peacekeepers" use force and threats to keep the people under control. dissent is outlawed and those who disobey the law are executed, flogged, or turned into avoxes. the games are another means in which the ruling elite in the capitol exert their power over the districts. when reading the books i drew parallels between panem and the soviet union and north korea. in no way is panem capitalist. the people in the capitol are wealthy but the majority of them are involved in the government somehow. it was the same way in the former soviet union where bigwigs in the communist party and high ranking government officials were given access to goods, services, medical treatments not available to the general public. if you think panem has a capitalist economy you need to brush up on your economics.  

chronological thinking is an indispensable tool to structure a historical narrative and to give meaning to a sequence of events. the final section presents the results of a survey to test the chronological thinking of lower secondary school students carried out by the educational research institute.