This commentary is from the question paper, 9093/12/O/N/18, please go through my commentary and tell me how to improve i really am struggling with this part of English. My exams are coming soon, please help me. Anyone, criticism would be much appreciated

First you need to change your hand writing.Examiners might give you less marks than you thought it to be.Second to make your essays attract the readers, you need to insert the main topic and don't forget to write the literal verse.Literal verse means the sentences that already been given in the statement or in the question.To make you clear, you must remind yourself to underline or highlight the keywords in the question given.By doing it this way, you already know how to write the essays according to the correct arrangment.Third, you must write the most important thing which is implied verse.It means your own ideas about something related to things that you wanna write.For example, you need to write about your nightmare and the question gives you just two hints such as you've screamed too much in your dream that people cannot hear any of it and you'd been invisible in your dream.Then the rest of it you need to come out with your own ideas.At this part, the readers might think that you're a creative writer.In your essays you wrote 'Paragraph 3'.Don't just simply write it like that.You need to add something in front of it like 'In'.So it'll be 'In paragraph 3'.Punctuations, grammars all of these are very important.To make it very interesting, you can add discourse marker.Last but not least, believe yourself and be confident with what you've done with it.I believe that you can improve this wayGood luck for your coming exam

answer; i believe its comparisons you to see your strengths and weaknesses;

individualism is the answer you are looking for.