OK GUYS LOOK I NEED THIS RN ASAP RED THIS STORY PROJECT: EXPLANATORY ESSAY Think back for a moment to the image of a house being built. First, a foundation is laid. Then the outside walls are framed. Next comes the framing of the individual rooms. Once the framing is complete, sheet rock is installed, along with electrical and plumbing. When all of the "technical" details are put into place, decorating begins. Writing an essay is a similar process. First, you need a foundation. The foundation is your topic. Outlining your main ideas and gathering supporting evidence is similar to the framing process. It is here that your essay starts to take shape. Developing your thesis statement, body paragraphs, introductory paragraph and concluding paragraph are all part of the building process. Now, you're ready to decorate! At the end of this project, you will be submitting the final draft of your explanatory essay. Let's get started.

OBJECTIVES
Revise a 5 paragraph explanatory essay.
Use formal writing style.
Revise drafts for content, grammatical, and spelling errors.
VOCABULARY
explanatory essay an essay that teaches something new, or shows a subject in a new or reorganized way; explains procedures, tasks, or how to understand an idea
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REVISING YOUR EXPLANATORY ESSAY
The purpose of an explanatory essay is to share information about a topic with an audience. Your essay should consist of the following:

Introductory paragraph with hook, transition, and thesis statement
3 body paragraphs with topic sentence, transition words, and supporting evidence
Concluding paragraph with a restatement of the introductory paragraph's hook, restatement of the thesis, transition words, and closing thought
When revising a rough draft, it is important to focus not simply on the main ideas of the essay, but also on the style, language, and transitions. Consider these your "decorative" elements that make the essay stand out.

Using a Formal Writing Style
Write in 3rd person avoiding pronouns such as "I" and "you".
Incorrect: You should always wear a helmet when riding a bike.
Correct: It is important to always wear a helmet when bicycling.
Avoid the use of contractions and abbreviations.
Incorrect: Bikes can't reach the same speed as cars, but they're faster than boards.
Correct: Bicycles are not as fast as cars, but they are faster than skateboards.
Avoid the use of slang.
Incorrect: That BMX is one sick ride!
Correct: Riding a BMX racing bicycle is exhilarating.
Use active voice
Incorrect: The bikes were being raced by the boys through the neighborhood.
Correct: The boys raced their bikes through the neighborhood.
Use technical language
Incorrect: The kids rode their bikes down the street.
Correct: The 6th graders pedaled their 10-speed Huffy bicycles down Main Street and to the middle school parking lot.
Use Transitional Words
Transitional words show the relationship between ideas and help the reader move easily from one idea to the next.
Transitional words can show similarities or differences between ideas, show the effects of an event, idea, or decision, and establish a sequence of events.
Overusing transitional words can detract from your writing. Limit use to 2-3 per paragraph.
Use the following chart to aid you in creating transitions.
Addition Contradiction Consequence Sequence
again
also
and
another
besides
as well as
likewise
moreover
similarly
furthermore
in addition although
and yet
even though
on the contrary
otherwise
on the other hand
however
in comparison
instead
nevertheless
yet
while as a result
because
consequently
so
hence
thus
fortunately first
second
after
throughout
presently
in the
beginning
during
earlier
finally
to begin with
next
now
once
Focus on Word Choice
Use words that are specific, not general.
Incorrect: It was really hot.
Correct: The summer sun was sweltering.
Use details that paint a vivid picture in the reader's mind.
Incorrect: The tornado's winds were very powerful.
Correct: The tornado, with wind speeds of over 200 miles per hour, tore through the fields pulling corn stalks from the ground and projecting them like missiles through the air.
Keep words active.
Incorrect: The football was thrown through the air.
Correct: The football spiraled through the air.
Step 4: Proofread
Read over your essay before turning it in.

THEN ANSWER THIS QUESTION PL Revise a 5 paragraph explanatory essay using formal writing style, technical language, and transitional words. Use the following checklist as you put your essay together:

Underline the thesis statement in the introductory paragraph.
Underline the topic sentence in each body paragraph.
Circle the supporting evidence used in the body paragraphs.
Count the number of transition words used in each paragraph.
Underline the restatement in the concluding paragraph.
ILL MAKE IT 50 POINTS