Look at the following short outline for an explanatory essay. how would you improve it?

claim: the aztec empire achieved greater developments in government, society, and culture than the inca empire.

i. introduction
ii. aztec empire
a. political developments
b. social developments
c. cultural developments
iii. conclusion

a. use more colorful language.
b. have the conclusion immediately following the introduction
c. introduce new arguments in the conclusion.
d. add a section about the inca empire.

in the spreadsheet, click on a cell, then type the numbers or text you want and press enter or tab. to write data to a new line within a cell, press alt + enter. to enter the same data in several cells at the same time you must select the cells in which you want to enter the same data, in the active cell write the data and press ctrl + enter.

femininity is conveyed through bernice's personality. she doesn't act how the other girls act and everyone thinks she is weird. she learns how to act in a way that was considered femininely appropriate at the time. she becomes so popular but her attempts to be liked end up backfiring when she is pressured into bobbing her hair. the author wrote that bernice cut off her cousin's hair in revenge for tricking her to cut her hair. this was the authors way of trying to change the way feminine is defined and the way women are expected to act.