Use the drop-down menus to identify revisions that improve the language in the passage.
Which revision would improve sentence 2?
Which revision would improve sentence 3?
(1) The accomplishment, not the effort, is what
impresses people. (2) No one has ever bin hired to be
a dentist because you worked hard in dental school.
(3) Instead, one has to accomplish the task of
graduating from a school of dentistry, that's how you
become a dentist. (4) Likewise, no one would ever hire
a struggling actor, no matter how talented, to host a
TV show. (5) Only an actor with name recognition and
several movie or TV appearances would be considered
for it. (6) Thinking that effort is more important than
luck is like thinking that water isn't needed to have a
swimming pool
Which revision would improve sentence 5?